Out of Bounds 2003:

Three Characters

Revision Notes

Revised Script

What Needs Fixing, and How Badly Does It Need to Be Fixed?

The Peter sez:

Damn. Unless it reads aloud radically differently to how it reads on the page, this one is good. Really good. I did some very minor edits that Bob should look over. I feel encouraged!

The Bob sez:

Timed out at 2:20; we can go longer if we stretch out the spacework and dramatic pauses.

I tightened "You forget that Steve" down to "Forget Steve"; it seems a little more natural.

Also, Dr. Kathy has three consecutive lines of "Erin." I changed one to "Kurt!" (admonishing him to stop moving.) I'm not sure of the blocking on this or what her intent was; what I see is her trying to get Erin's attention while keeping Kurt still, getting a little frustrated at doing both simultaneously. If I misunderstood the original intent, revert the change. (Peter: nah, that's fine.)

Otherwise, it looks good.

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